I was out walking looking for berries for my pancakes. When I stumbled across an old rustic cottage with the door swinging open. knock knock a rat a tat tat no one replied. I got worried “who would leave the door open and not be home?. I thought to my self I quickly entered the cottage to check everyone was okay I know CPR.

When I entered the house I saw someone yummy streaming pancake with strawberries on the side and then i went like let’s eat the pancake with strawberry and milo I tried the big one and it was so so hot and even the milo was so hot I also tried mummy bears one her one was way to cold for me and i mean cold like a freezer and then i tried Baby bears one his one was just right for me like i mean so warm and perfect.

When I went into the lounge I went and sat on every chair that was there to see which one was the perfect fit. When I sat on daddy chairs it was as hard as a wooden floor. When I tried to sit on the mummy bear’s chair I sank right in because it was as soft as a bear, and the last chair I had to sit on was a baby bear’s chair and it was just the right fit for me … “Oh no!” The baby bear’s chair collapsed into pieces.

When baby bears chair had collapsed into pieces I walked into a room full of different sized beds and did the same thing  I went on daddy bear bed it was way to hard for me it can probably break my back so then i went to mummy bears bed it was to cold and way to big and then I went onto baby bears bed it was just right I suddenly fell asleep on baby bears bed.

When Daddy , Mummy and baby bear came back home I was still sleeping. When they went into the kitchen to eat their yummy pancakes and strawberries, daddy said “ oh no” who ate my yummy breakfast, mummy bear said “oh no” who ate my delicious  breakfast, and baby bear said “ohh noo” who ate all my breakfast. 

Before the bears had known that more damage was caused they looked in their lounge and daddy got a bit angrier and said “who sat on my chair”, mummy bear said “ oh no” who sat on my chair, then baby bear said “ What happened to my chair”.

When they went inside their room daddy bear had enough of anger and said “ now who slept on my bed”, mummy bear also had enough and said “ who slept on my bed”, baby bear had already seen who was sleeping on his slept on his bed, broke his chair, and ate his yummy breakfast. He woke Goldilocks up and started yelling at her as she ran outside. Then from that day on the bears knew to keep their front door and back door locked so that no one could get inside and do what Goldilocks did. The End!!!. 

Malo e Lelei bloggers

We are trying to change a story from 3rd person / Narrotor to 1st person. We had to:

• Pick a fariy tale we know so we can reveiw it
• Brainstorm a fairytale from anther characters point of view i chose to do 3 Donkeys and sherk
• Add words to describe my character 3 donkey and sherk 1st donkey is ,youngest,scared,hugry,has a older sister and middle brother
• Check we have the main events from the story and number in order to remind me to use paragraph
• Then we had to write our own paragraph.

here is my first paragraph.

Me and my two youngest siblings woke up to a loud bang and I went to go check it out and when I went and check out what we were doing and then after that we went on an adventrue walk my siblings were Felica & Fregus I was Frakle and there was only 3 of us My dad went to go shoping with my mum and when they came back we went thorugh the woods to go collect some stuff for our dinner and when we were done we went to grandmas house because the fruits were for her and when we got there we made some food for grandma we made cootege pie after we made that we went and did activites and then I went to go for a vaction with my siblings when we got back from  our vacation we went for a walk upp the road and then went home.